Post by 3 on Feb 1, 2011 21:26:58 GMT -5
hello there. i do not want to sound mean or rude, because honestly i am not trying to be. i am here to help, and there is really only one suggestion i have to make. i've noticed that there are a couple of grammatical errors in some of your posts. i do no believe this is because you are a bad writer, i believe you simply need to proof read your posts before hitting the post button.
the 'si' in the beginning there is obviously a typo.
where should be were.
worst should be worse.
this is definitely a run-on sentence. also, if you're typing literately '10' should be written as 'ten' and 'ya' should be 'yeah' also, you put 'where' instead of 'were' again. the sentence, honestly, doesn't make too much sense to me.
once again 'where' instead of 'were', twice. this sentence also does not flow very well, and makes little sense.
the first one is a sentence fragment.. the second one is a little iffy about standing on its own... i suggest: "It took over twenty years, and this is where we are now."
i believe you meant 'week' there. i have also noticed in many of your posts ( because i have read them on other sites and stuff ) that you like to use 'fell' instead of 'feel' or 'hopped' instead of 'hoped' all of these words have pretty different meanings, and your posts would be one hundred percent better if you would proof read them and keep these things from happening. you cannot ask the role players of your forum to role play literately if you make small errors in your posts such as these.
please do not think that i am trying to be mean to you, i promise i am not. i'm just trying to help you.
honestly, everything else about the site is great. the skin is pleasing to the eye, the header image is beautiful. i believe these minor spelling mistakes might actually be keeping people from joining your forum. i can't think of any other reason.
now, you can get angry at me... and argue with me.. or even delete my post. honestly, i don't care what you do. i am just trying to help you, and the best thing you can do is take my advice.
also, with the coding. the background image thing isn't working on your profile because you have too much in your signature and there isn't enough room for its image URL.
Si keep it short, and minimal symbols and numbers.
the 'si' in the beginning there is obviously a typo.
It had been 10 years since the cats have been there and the humans where just about to kill the world, pollution, taking fossil fuel, technology
where should be were.
But that made global warming worst, and many parts of the world go colder.
worst should be worse.
The cat's tried to survive in their new clans, they each have about 10 cats even more but food was hard to come by and humans well ya they where taking over, but somehow slowly stopping at the same time.
this is definitely a run-on sentence. also, if you're typing literately '10' should be written as 'ten' and 'ya' should be 'yeah' also, you put 'where' instead of 'were' again. the sentence, honestly, doesn't make too much sense to me.
The cats where not sure what they where doing but we humans do, we where trying to save the world.
once again 'where' instead of 'were', twice. this sentence also does not flow very well, and makes little sense.
Which took over 20 years. And this is where we are now.
the first one is a sentence fragment.. the second one is a little iffy about standing on its own... i suggest: "It took over twenty years, and this is where we are now."
Please don't disappear for two wekks
i believe you meant 'week' there. i have also noticed in many of your posts ( because i have read them on other sites and stuff ) that you like to use 'fell' instead of 'feel' or 'hopped' instead of 'hoped' all of these words have pretty different meanings, and your posts would be one hundred percent better if you would proof read them and keep these things from happening. you cannot ask the role players of your forum to role play literately if you make small errors in your posts such as these.
please do not think that i am trying to be mean to you, i promise i am not. i'm just trying to help you.
honestly, everything else about the site is great. the skin is pleasing to the eye, the header image is beautiful. i believe these minor spelling mistakes might actually be keeping people from joining your forum. i can't think of any other reason.
now, you can get angry at me... and argue with me.. or even delete my post. honestly, i don't care what you do. i am just trying to help you, and the best thing you can do is take my advice.
also, with the coding. the background image thing isn't working on your profile because you have too much in your signature and there isn't enough room for its image URL.
